Hello，everyone! I am very happy that I can sand here to have a This is the first time for me to give speech in E I want to talk about my hometown--J Jiaxing is a familiar place for us ， and we already know lots about it Question， If a stranger wants to know our hometown better， what will you interduce? As we all know the city tree of Jiaxing is XXXX And the city flower is XXXXXXThere are many special local products in Jiaxing， for example Jiaxing Wufangzhai zongzi and ① Jiaxing also have been many historical For example this is Yu H This is Xu Z This ia Jin Y This is Feng ZAs we all know Jiaxing is a beautiful city， so why don't we to enjoy our hometown in different view? This is S This is the south Where is this? This is Xiuzhou district of the new I'm very proud of my JI love you so Thank you for 你好，我已经修改完毕。其中XXXX部分是你家乡的市花、市树的名字。我猜你幻灯片里面应该有，但是这里还是写出来比较好。 我标注①的位置是需要你添加的，添加的内容是你家乡的特产，我看你举例只举了一个例子，太少。一般来说2~3个例子最好，如果只举一个例子， 那就要详细描述这个特产和别的地方相似产品的不同了，比如制作工艺，口感等方面。 如果需要进一步修改你可以追加描述，个别用英语描述不清的地方，你直接用汉语描述就好。我抽时间再给你修改。
Topic: Re-recognition of the value of school sportsmanshipAbstract: Physical education is the main vector for the physical act of open education activities， school sports and moral thinking in young people play an important role in the Based on the current shortage of school education in sportsmanship， from building a harmonious society， unmarried children， and other aspects of the new curriculum for schools of education by the sportsmanship of the new requirements of research， believe that the value of the new school sportsmanship awareness and positioning， so that its adaptation to changing social needs and better qualified people to cultivate socialist Key words: schools; sports; ethics; value; sportsmanship; the value of sportsmanship加油。。。。。。。。。。。。。
简单的修改了一下，希望你能看得出来。Hello，everyone! I am very happy that I can stand here to have a This is the first time for me to have a English If my specch isn't good enough， please forgive Today， my topic is my hometown--J Jiaxing is our hometown， we should know more about First， let us look at some introduction of J This is the city tree of J And this is the city Jiaxing has many speciality， let's These are Jiaxing Wufangzhai Jiaxing also has lots of famous people in the Let's This is Yu H This is Xu Z This ia Jin Y This is Feng Z Jiaxing is a beautiful city， let's have a good look at the beauty of J This is S This is the south Where is this? it is in Xiuzhou district of the new government(应该是district，新区是吧？） I'm very proud of my hometown J And I am proud of that I live in J I love you， J I hope you will love Jiaxing more after my speech，My speech is over， thank you!
Hello， everyone! I'm so glad to stand here to have a speech(SPEECH写错了哦） And this is my very first time English speech （不用特地用that，very first time是强调这是你的第一次英语演讲） Hope you enjoy it（你的那句是典型的中式英语，如果讲得不好，希望大家原谅。真正英语里不会这样讲的哦，你就说喜欢大家喜欢就ok了） Today， my topic is my hometown-JI Jiangyin city is our hometown， which we need to know more about it(这样表达好点吧？我们需要对它更多地了解，不需要加上KNOWLEDGE，那样就是了解更多知识） First， let me show you some introduction of Jiangxi (既然是你在做演讲，用show you 会好一点吧，首先我给大家展示一些关于江西的介绍） This is a very beautiful city with many trees and flowers(this is the city tree of Jiangxi和花儿那一句本身表达就是不对的，你可以直接说成这是一个充满绿树和鲜花的美丽城市） Jiangxi has many special scenic spots(江西有许多的风景名胜，speciality是专长的意思，用在这里并不合适，let's see也可以省略），such as WUFANGZHAI rice dumpling，Santa， south lake， as well as many famous (可以直接接上一句，江西有很多名胜特产，比如五芳斋粽子，和一些名人) These people are: Yuhua， Xu zhimo， Jinyong， Fengzikai （那些人是余华、徐志摩、金庸、丰子恺等等） 后面介绍的SANTA， SOUTH LAKE等可以直接归到前面的风景名胜里I'm very proud of my hometown-Jiangxi city， and so glad to live in this I love Jiangxi so much， and hope everyone likes this beautiful That's all， thank you very much! (不要用my speech is over，一般用THAT'S ALL) 这些是我的意见，你参考下吧，其实英语表达的时候是越简略越好，一句话可以说清楚的不必要用太多词来表达，加油吧，祝你演讲成功
